User:Tiff592/Nanoelectrochemistry/MeganMezera Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Tiff592, Chhan02, Ymukohya


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Tiff592/Nanoelectrochemistry?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Nanoelectrochemistry

Evaluate the drafted changes
Awesome work with the draft! The content seems to work great with the rest of the paragraph, but there seem to be a couple of issues with formatting:


 * 1) the text doesn't match with the rest of the article, like with the font and headings
 * 2) some of the stylized choice and wording make the addition seem separated from the current article
 * 3) while the current article is straight-to-the-point, there are some filler sentences within the draft that could probably be cut or reworded to be less extravagant
 * 4) example: "The advent of batteries has revolutionized our lives, and more importantly, batteries are the power source of choice for emerging electrified transportation modes, as well as energy storage technologies required to rely on renewable energy sources such as wind and solar radiation."
 * 5) a few of the sentences have wording issues
 * 6) example: "By integrating benefit feature from different metal elements and testing under different conditions..."
 * 7) finally, just make sure to put the citations within the format for Wikipedia
 * 8) example: "...to determine the best material surface for electron to utilize CO2 [1]."

I really liked the addition of a figure, I think it helps with the explanation of things!