User:Tiff592/Nanoelectrochemistry/Mwongz Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Tiff592


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Tiff592/Nanoelectrochemistry?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Nanoelectrochemistry

Evaluate the drafted changes
Overall, I really like the addition of the potential applications section as it shows that not only there can be applications for nanoelectrochemistry, but also that the range of applications is quite wide from being used in batteries to being used for carbon dioxide reduction.

For the battery application section,

I really liked the first paragraph as it's sort of the intro where you state the importance of batteries and how nanoelectrochemistry can help further push battery development further. One thing that I think you guys should be careful about is to not include your own opinions since a wikipedia page should be objective in its content. For example, you say that batteries have revolutionized our lives, while I don't disagree with the statement and the statement might be fine to include, maybe rewording it so that it conveys the same idea without stating that batteries have revolutionized our lives. A small edit that should be made is at the end of the first paragraph, the sentence is quite awkward, perhaps you meant to say that Nanoelectrochemistry has the potential to be significant for battery research?

I thought your second paragraph was really well done since you stated what the problem and how nanoelectrochemistry can be the solution to that problem. You also gave a brief explanation which is great.

For the third paragraph, I think that discussing the techniques of incorporating nanoelectrochemistry into batteries is an amazing addition to your article. I would've loved to see you go a little more in depth with this paragraph such as briefly exploring the pros and cons of each technique.

For the carbon dioxide reduction section,

Once again, I really like the first paragraph since it's a good intro into what you're talking about and you do an really good job of explaining how nanoelectrochemistry can help with carbon dioxide reduction. Similar to before, see if it's possible to reword your sentences to avoid opinions such as "Nanoparticle is currently the hottest technology for..." Furthermore, I would suggest reading this paragraph out loud as there are some grammatical errors and awkward wordings littered throughout the paragraph.

Finally, I really appreciated the addition of the figure and you explaining the figure in addition to giving an example of a current application.

Overall, I thought that all of your additions to the article were good additions and that your main points were informative. I would suggest re-reading your work and to fix any grammatical errors or awkward wordings as they were persistent throughout my readthrough.

For example, you initially wrote "As an example, one of the most current applications is AgPd. It is a leading nanoparticle to be used for reducing CO2 to CO as it is high selectivity to the product of CO, requires low voltage, meanwhile remains releventaly stable for reaction."

Perhaps something along the lines of "For example, a current application is the use of AgPd as the leading nanoparticle used for reducing CO2 to CO as it is highly selective in producing CO and requires a low voltage while remaining relatively stable for reaction."