User:Tiffanynacario22/Feminism in Japan/Briannabryant2 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Tiffanynacario22


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Tiffanynacario22/Feminism_in_Japan?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Feminism in Japan

Evaluate the drafted changes
After reading the article and Tiffany's draft, I think it is important to add that women were fighting for equal rights before the 1870 civil rights movement. I also think the source is reliable, as it is from the Oxford Research Encyclopedia, and the information Tiffany writes about is an accurate representation of that source. However, I think the two sentences following that are too broad to relate specifically to feminism. There should be a tie in sentence about how the "awakening" and leaders goals affected the women's movements. Overall, it is a well-written addition and seems unbiased, but could be more specifically tied to this Wikipedia article topic.