User:Tiffanyrodi/Anorexia nervosa/Joyb3 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Tiffanyrodi


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Tiffanyrodi/Anorexia_nervosa?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Anorexia nervosa

Evaluate the drafted changes
I think adding a section about AN and aging is a good addition. I would recommend a few changes in grammar and structure (I bolded them):

"The stimulus for anorexia in elderly patients is typically..."

"leads to anorexia of aging, including a decline in chewing ability..."

"decline in chewing ability, a decline in taste and smell, and a decrease in appetite.[3]"

"develop anorexia can include depression and bereavement, and even an indirect suicide attempt.[3]"

"comorbid psychiatric conditions with aging anorexics, including major depression..."

"...disorder, bipolar disorder, schizophrenia, and dementia.[4]"

So, adding this section about AN's impact on an aging populace is good, and I also think you could write about how AN impacts different demographics. Men v. Women, younger v. older, and white v. BIPOC demographics will all be affected differently. I think you could do a great job of writing about that. This section is already a great addition. Your structure is really good and flows very well.

I would add some stuff to the lead paragraphs in the article. Try to weave this section into the whole article by adding information about the geriatric population in AN and eating disorders.