User:Tiffanyrodi/Anorexia nervosa/Shivamp1999 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Tiffanyrodi


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Tiffanyrodi/Anorexia_nervosa?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Anorexia nervosa
 * Anorexia nervosa

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Hi Tiffany, I thoroughly enjoyed reading your article contribution. The first thing I noticed about your first paragraph is that is starts with the Anorexia Nervosa in the 1950s. After it speaks about the 1950s, the section heads more into a cultural and social aspect rather than the age.

I would suggest to reword the title from Anorexia of aging to Aging with Anorexia to make it flow better. The paragraph is well worded with segways into each new section.

The ending allows you to delve deeper into adolescents with anorexia.

The content is neutral. It does not seem to have a side.

I cannot seem to see if your second reference is from a peer-reviewed article.

Personally, I would second guess about using the third article. PLOS ONE publishes most work as long as it achieves technical, scientific, and ethical rigor. Previous professors of mine recommend trying to find other sources before using this one.