User:TigerERTH4303/Carminic acid/Ajmaclaurin Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

TigerERTH4303


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:TigerERTH4303/Carminic acid
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Carminic acid

Evaluate the drafted changes
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Lead:

There is limited change to the lead. I would recommend finding a source for the sentence "Synonyms are C.I. 75470 and C.I. Natural Red 4." or simply removing the sentence entirely. A sentence about how the insects produce the acid or where the acid is on the insects would be beneficial and possibly a good idea for another paragraph.

Content:

Content added is very relevant to the topic and very informative. The second sentence under the heading "Use as a Deterrent" is a run on sentence. Turning it into 2 or 3 independent sentences would allow better flow in the paragraph. There isn't a lot of traffic on this page and since its a stub class with low importance, I don't think using the talk page would be beneficial to improving your article. Are there any other uses for carminic acid? Is there enough information to make another paragraph on its use as a dye?

Tone and Balance:

The tone of the new content is neutral and does not intend to persuade the reader in any way. It is strictly informative.

Sources:

All the references are from reliable sources. Reference 9 needs a publication date if the information can be found.

Organization:

The article is well organized. Headings are clear and concise.

Images and Media:

No new media was added. I assume that the table on the right hand side of the article will remain once you add your new sections to the article. If that's the case, I would suggest reviewing the table and clearing up the verification suggestion at the bottom. The reference for the table is no longer in the reference list and therefore would also need to be added again. A picture of the acid or the insect could be added to the "Harvesting from Cochineals" section but is not necessary (I know that we have a week where we add media to the pages).

Overall Impressions:

Overall I like the additions you've done to the article. You added more information for the reader to understand how carminic acid is harvested and how scale insects use it as a deterrence. Adding another paragraph on how carminic acid is produced in the bug or on the dye that uses it would be beneficial to the article.