User:Tikey105!/Mean world syndrome/Anonymousardvark Peer Review

General info
(provide username): User:Tikey105!, Izzyabella2003, Ks20ga
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Tikey105!/Mean world syndrome
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Mean world syndrome

Evaluate the drafted changes
Organization:

I reviewed the underlined sections of the peer-review as the user indicated those were the edits made that they had added to the article. I also read the rest of the article on the actual wikipedia page and compared it to the groups sandbox draft to double check what edits were made. For the underlined portion, I think adding in the historical context of how mean world syndrome began with television is relevant. To make it more compatible with the rest of the article, I would make sure it is under the "History" section when it is transfered over to the actual wikipedia page. It would also be necessary to add in the proper citation and reference to the underlined text as it is currently missing.

Content:

In terms of content of the underlined text, I would suggest splitting it into two or more sentences and adding on or expanding, as right now it reads as a run on sentence which of course makes sense because it is just a rough draft. FOor the COVID-19 section, I think the small copy edits help the flow significantly. I would suggest adding a citation to the first claim underlined (even if the reference for it is on the page, which I believe it is) just in case, for avoiding plagiarism. Adding the information from the 2021 study is great and adds relevant information to the doom-scrolling definition and topic.

Tone and Balance:

The tone and balance flowed with the wikipedia article context already written. However, like I mentioned above I would suggest splitting the underlined portion into multiple sentences for flow.

Overall a great start.