User:Tikey105!/Mean world syndrome/Cmk21 Peer Review

General info
Tikey105!
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 * User:Tikey105!/Mean world syndrome
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Mean world syndrome

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead

The added sentences in the lead were relevant since it was too short before and followed with the tone of the sentences that came before it. Also made it sound more up to date by underlining the impact of that social media has on this syndrome. Overall it describes the article's topic, kept brief but still detailed.

Content

The content added was definitely relevant to the topic. Especially the study conducted in 2021 in the COVID-19 section was perfect because it gave an example of something that was relevant and up to date.

Tone and Balance

Tone and diction was all neutral, did not sound biased at all towards any position or personal.

Sources and References

Yes the sources are all thorough, current, and reliable. Especially they were good with citing it within the text at the appropriate spots as well. They are peer-reviewed and credible sources that are listed accordingly in the references.

Organization

It was all very easy to read, additionally with the added parts it flowed a lot better. There were no grammatical errors or spelling errors. Although I would suggest in the COVID-19 and mean world syndrome section, the fourth sentence could need a comma. "During the pandemic, in order to stay up to date and close the information gap regarding COVID-19 many people engaged heavily in the act of doomscrolling." Perhaps adding a comma after COVID-19 could help with the flow of the sentence better by having a pause there.

Images and Media

There are currently no images but as the drafting goes on some would be recommended for visual examples.

Overall impressions

The added information was quite needed and all important information when understanding this topic. Especially since the lead is important, added those few sentence has revamped it for sure. Initially, the COVID-19 section seemed way too short and out of place but now it seems as important as the other sections with the added information and examples. Also I found it quite clever that they underlined their changes in the draft which made it easier to compare to the original.