User:Timmy Thyme/Inwood Hill Park/J-smoothe06 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Timmy Thyme


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Timmy Thyme/Inwood Hill Park


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Inwood Hill Park

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

The lead section provides the objectives of the article, which it good to know what the article would be about. However, it should introduce the topic, species found in Inwood Hill Park. In addition, try to say, "the article will focus on..." instead of mentioning "the group". The article seems to be lacking primary resources and focuses more on secondary resources (websites). The content of "Economic Impact" may seem irrelevant to the theme. Instead of talking about economic impact on New York, a potential idea could be how the urbanization of New York may affect diversity. The majority of the articles are current and working, except for one that is from 1987. The group should try to find some primary resources such as research papers or journals to help focus on the diversity of species in Inwood Hill Park. For example, you can research articles that focus on the diversity in the park and the amount of species richness it produces, or how species diversity in Inwood Hill changed over time. The tone of the article seems to have a neutral standpoint. Overall, the article needs some improvement in terms of content and resources. In terms of the strengths, the article mentioned good ideas that would build in the body of the article. The article should use those ideas mentioned in the lead section and expand on them.