User:Tinammys/Evaluate an Article

Which article are you evaluating?
Social revolution

Why you have chosen this article to evaluate?
I am interested in Social Science, and how societies changed from the past to now. It really matters by telling people the history of societies change. By this way, people can realize that everything that gets to where it is today is not a sudden change, but a gradual growth. I think this article is shorter than my expect, as if it could have written more, but it didn't. Wikipedia also noticed me that this article is a stub: an article which is too short and need for further expanding.

Evaluate the article
This is a relatively narrower vocabulary, and I know this word today, thank you for your efforts! But from the perspective of article, these are my opinions:


 * Leading part is well-organized in a brief way; however, the first sentence is too similar with your sources: your source explains social revolution as "sudden change in the structure and nature of society" and your definition of social revolution is "Social revolutions are sudden changes in the structure and nature of society." You just made the original sentence's subject plural with the same sentence structure, and you didn't paraphrase it in your own words. I also think you should change your words "but more than just the political systems" to more neutral tone. By saying this, it looks like changes in political systems are less important.
 * Your reference is mainly from last centuries. I am very grateful that you mentioned a considerable number of references in a short amount of writing, but they are all older books. I'm sure some sociologist has referred to the term "social revolution" at a more recent date.
 * Overview is a starting point, not an enough solid content. As a reader, I am really thrilled to read what factors lead those social revolutions; examples of social revolutions; pro and cons about social revolutions; methods to mitigate risks the con side bring.
 * As a Wikipedia writer, you should use simple, comprehensive language for readers of all levels of education level. In this article, I get the feeling that you assume that your readers know a lot, so instead of explaining it, you give many Wikipedia links about those words. Opening another links is very distracting and readers will lost their focus.
 * As mentioned in the previous points, don't turn your article into a hub for various Wikipedia links, but try to write your own summarized, neutral content.