User:Tkeogh11/Renu C. Laskar/Kerrigd Peer Review

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Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead:

The lead in this article could better reflect the topics that are explained in more detail. While there was great content within the lead, including important information such as where Laskar is from and key details of her life, there are areas that should be removed or replaced to keep the continuity and leave room for further discussion. For example, I believe that the sentence "Renu Chakravarti Laskar's life was marked by a personal loss when her husband, Amulya L. Laskar, a distinguished professor of physics, died in 1991." does not belong in the lead as it was only mentioned here and not explained in further detail. Instead, a better way to introduce this topic would be to say "Laskar has been met with both triumph and tribulations, personally and professionally". This would open the conversation for a deeper discussion about the impact the loss of her husband had on her.

Content:

The content within this article has great potential to be sharp. The information is all presented accurately, however there is room for more detail. The subheadings are great in that they cover exactly what should be described about Laskar's life, being early life and education, and academic life. The academic life section could be described in more depth and answer questions like: what impact did she make? what in specific does she study? this is the section where the graph theory talked about in the lead should be brought up again.

Tone and Balance

The tone and balance of this article is neutral and consistent. I would consider discussing her impact in cell biology further, as that is what she is known for.

Sources and References

The sources used are strong. I think it would be beneficial for the article to include additional sources about her career and impacts she has made in the realm of cellular biology. It could be good to link Professor Emerita to a wikipedia article of what that is because I had to search it up, so many others might benefit from the quick access to that information.

Organization

There are some grammar mistakes that should be paid attention. The flow of the article is slow and inconsistent. There are a lot of long sentences with commas in one subheading followed by sentences that are short and choppy in the next. For the most part it does not take away from the information being presented.

Overall Impression

I learned a lot about a professor at my university so I really enjoyed reading this article. Of course there is no such thing as a perfect article, but I still think this article has a ways to improve. The information included is accurate and thoughtful, but some areas could be explained further to maintain a general flow about the article. Overall, I think this article did the job it set out to do: inform those about the life and experiences of Laskar!