User:Tkmu/Accelerated pluralism/Fsharbi Peer Review

It is a very informative and succinct written article on “accelerated pluralism.” However, it seems to me that the author needs to provide some more basic information to the audience regarding the concept. Although the lead section looks good, the statements below the “concept title” need be explained in a more understandable way. One strategy could be adding an introduction paragraph to prepare the audience what they will learn under this title. For example, an additional paragraph, probably the first one under the concept, should introduce the topic, provide simple explanations, and connect the concept with the technology. After this paragraph is added, the rest would be easier for the audience to grasp the implications of the concept.

I provided a sample paragraph, which can be added as the first paragraph, below:

''The topic of “accelerated pluralism” is an important concept, especially studied by the political scientists. The concept basically means the acceleration of political attitudes over certain topics in way that should not have been channeled through. However, given the competitive environment provided by democratic values and norms, groups within democracies can find themselves around their narrowly defined interests, rather than their main interests. According to Barney’s book, The Network Society, technological advancements, such as increased use of internet and mobile phones, increase this tendency.''

Please make sure that you provide your own updates if you feel like it can be better.

Also, I think one reference should be fixed. Note that this is the most important reference in the article. In your article, your fourth reference shows that Barney’s book was published in 2013. However, I learned that it was first published in 2004. I recommend double-checking year information. If you use a specific edition after the first edition, please make sure that you provide this information in your updated reference.

Here is the reference you might consider comparing with yours: "Barney, D. (2004). The network society (Vol. 2). Polity."

Other than these minor points, I really think it is a well-written article that includes correct, impartial, and important information about “accelerated pluralism.”

Thank you!

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