User:Tkmu/Evaluate an Article

Which article are you evaluating?
Electronic Information Exchange System

Why you have chosen this article to evaluate?
I chose to evaluate an article related to an interesting topic that has both technology and policy considerations that are inextricably linked and mutually beneficial. I also chose an article that needed additional research or validation to contribute to the broader depth of knowledge in the field. From 'Academic Disciplines' to 'Social sciences' to 'Computer-mediated communications' to ' Electronic Information Exchange System' assumes an inherent but general ontology that exists between a specific technology integration and multiple policy requirements.

Evaluate the article
The lead clearly and concisely describes the article’s topic and content, but could be improved discussing the overview of major sections. The article’s content is relevant to the topic, but could be updated and further validated and additional content could be included. The article does not address Wikipedia’s equity gaps or historically underrepresented populations or topics. The article is from a neutral point of view and does not appear to be biased, if anything it could use additional opinion or extension of information that is more current. Source review should be evaluated to update reliable secondary source of information, additional literature, and more current sources. The article is well-written and had limited grammatical improvements and/or spelling errors. The organization is well-organized but could be improved. There were limited images. Overall this article could be improved. It is factual and provides specific information, but could be extended.

The article provides relevant links to keywords that describe the topic and provides a limited timeline of the Electronic Information Exchange System as it evolved through two iterations before being retired [1]. The name was retired but capability facets of the system still exist and might have even informed many social media platforms that exist currently. There were few distractions as the article was very direct, but a significant portion of space was provided to the university where the technology was fostered.

Information may be out of date as the article requires additional input, citation, and validation as recommended by Wikipedia. Recommend adding supporting policy documentation and adjacent topics to complete the ontology. In it's current state the article does have existing gaps that would provide a better context and additional timeline leading to the current day world wide web with additional details. As this platform evolved from a centralized time-sharing environment to a distributed environment it could have been made available to any member of the general public that paid a monthly fee and connect-time charges [1]. In present day, this capability would likely not require connection fees but in today’s dollars, $75.00 from 1985 would be about $186.14 [2] as well as the cost of a personal computer or mobile device.

This technology might not have been available based upon socio-economic disadvantagedness, or lack of awareness to it’s existence, in order to validate additional research would be required. According to Howard Rheingold in his book, The Virtual Community, this technology was ”the lively great-great-grandmother of all virtual communities” [3]. Although the article did not mention any underrepresented or marginalized groups, it was user-developed and intended to create a collaborative environment for everyone. The article appears to be neutral, but the technology was limited to 1000 people [1] potentially due to technical adoption penetrance, or limitation by the technology and physical proximity to it.

Some of the links are irrelevant, but do link to other article discussions on particular words. These links could be updated with more specific and relevant content. The cited articles, were good. The community that supported development of this system was based upon a population within the Computerized Conferencing and Communications Center at NJIT so it would likely have been insular, and without significant research would be unable to determine the diversity within the group outside of their academic interests and affiliations. Wikipedia does not have a talk page with this article. It is categorized as: Pre-World Wide Web online services, New Jersey Institute of Technology, Educational software, Virtual learning environments, Distance education in the United States, E-learning, Bulletin board systems, and Computer-mediated communication [1]. This article provides a direct synopsis of the technology’s origins and summary with little discussion, evaluation, or debate.

References:

[1] https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Electronic_Information_Exchange_System

[2] https://www.usinflationcalculator.com

[3] https://people.well.com/user/hlr/vcbook/vcbook4.html