User:Tltuggle18/Crowd psychology/Mdbutler7 Peer Review

General info
Tltuggle18
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Tltuggle18/Crowd psychology - Wikipedia
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Crowd psychology - Wikipedia

Evaluate the drafted changes
I think the lead of this article could use some improvement. I'm not sure that the lead does a sufficient job portraying what is to come in the body of the article, and the last couple sentences are hard to comprehend/need some spelling/grammar work:

"Many of these theories are today tested or used to simulate crowd behaviors in normal or emergency situations. One of the main focuses in these simulation works is to prevent crowd crushes and stampares."

I personally think the Origins section of the article has too much opinionated claims/lack of references, and some of the information seems to serve the article in no useful way. The structure of the article has a lot of potential and serves as a good outline to work from, but many of the references seem extremely outdated. A quick glance at the references section shows most of the sources being from the 1900's, and very few sources are from recent years.

As for your edits to the Types of crowds section, I think the addition of a riot example and citation was appropriate. However, I'm not sure how credible your news article reference is for the Astroworld concert citation. Perhaps it could be more appropriate to create a hyperlink to the Astroworld event citing the Wiki page for it:

Astroworld Festival crowd crush - Wikipedia

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Thank you for your feedback! I've been having trouble with this assignment so this is well needed. TLT