User:Tmitfc/Twentieth Dynasty of Egypt/Gadzooksopposite Peer Review

General info
Tmitfc
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Tmitfc/Twentieth Dynasty of Egypt
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Twentieth Dynasty of Egypt

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead (1)

The lead does a good job summarizing the article. I notice you added a mention of the Sea Peoples, but from what I understand they are hypothetical and not fully known to be real. I think you could mention they are a possible explanation, and link to the article.

Clarity (2)

I think it's a good idea to summarize the events of the dynasty. Are you going to add it under Background? Maybe you could add a section about the Sea Peoples.

Coverage Balance (3)

Could you add more information to your section? How was the civil war won? How does the 20th dynasty relate to the bronze age?

Content Neutrality (4)

I think without sources, it feels a bit biased to compare Egypt to other Bronze age Civilizations to show that it was better.

Sources (5)

I think you need to add sources for your additions. Maybe you could cite yours with a page number?