User:Todd042/Pesticide poisoning/Secretshrub Peer Review

General info
Todd042
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Todd042/Pesticide poisoning
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Pesticide poisoning

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead: States the section of the article being edited.

Content: The sentence feels redundant with information already present in the article. You mention the implications of contributing to neurodegenerative diseases, but the article already includes these diseases and other effects of long-term exposures.

Tone and Balance: The added sentence is objective.

Sources and References: I would add your new source as a citation on the work you added that way readers know where that information came from.

Organization: The sentence is redundant, and even then should be earlier in the established article paragraph.

Overall, I feel the added sentence is not necessary but you can always add your citations to the article to increase the credibility of the article.