User:Todd042/Pesticide poisoning/ToxicologyIsEpic Peer Review

General info
Todd042
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Pesticide poisoning
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * n/a

Evaluate the drafted changes
Yes, the lead had seemed to be updated, displaying the new content on the Pesticide Poisoning wiki page, added by user: Todd042. The intro sentence to the draft had been decently concise, describing the the definition of the ensuing page and clearing up the three separate aspects of the pesticide poisoning article described.

I would highly suggest applying more reasoning and text under the 'cause' section of the article, I found the description to be value and unsatisfactory prior to leading into the 3 most common causes, being accidental, occupational, and residential. Additionally, more detail to the accidental portion specifically of the article, paling in comparison to the other two sections above it in terms of information. I feel like there could also be more preventative measures added in the 'prevention' section. Under this same preventative section, the sentence concerning genetically modified crops was not cited in the first sentence of this paragraph. Proper citation should be added, otherwise this section should be revoked from the page undoubtedly if there was no sourcing..

The sectioning of this article I was less of a fan of. I recommend more specific section titles to the described subject following the title. One word sections I found less useful than they could have potentially been had the article been summarized through its sections more accurately. I do not intend to utilize a similar style to this article's organization style, but the article general flow of information presented was sufficient.