User:Tofu jail/Jung Yeondoo/Tofu jail Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Toeyeball


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Tofu%20jail/Jung_Yeondoo?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * https://ko.wikipedia.org/wiki/%EC%A0%95%EC%97%B0%EB%91%90

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

The brief introduction on Jung Yeondoo is concise and clear. It includes and summarizes everything you talk about except the awards and collections Jung received. The lead reflects the new content added about the article's major sections. The content and organization is relevant and well-represented. I noticed how you include his most prominent exhibitions and works of art, and maybe you could elaborate on how the relate to each other and build upon Jung's career as an artist. You could also expand on the awards section, and explain how he gained recognition and a specific work that gave Jung the "Artist of the Year 2007 Award". Also, I liked how you differentiated a list between the solo exhibitions and the public collections, but I am not quite sure of the purpose of listing all of them if you are only going to discuss about a select few. Overall, there is great improvement on your article. Finally, the sources are reputable and the content accurately reflect what the cited sources say.