User:Togata27/Nisei Women Translators during WWII/Abella16 Peer Review

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 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Togata27/Nisei Women Translators during WWII
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Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead

The lead section is a newly created section. The topic sentence is a brief overview of the article's topic/subject matter. The lead is concise and provides helpful links to other Wikipedia Articles for the related topics mentioned in the section. All topics discussed in the article are mentioned in the lead section besides the notable translators.

Content

The content added is all relevant to the topic. The content also contributes to the effort to close the women-related content gap on Wikipedia. The content added is all up to date. There is no content that does not belong. Some content that appears to be "missing" or might be helpful if covered is more in regards to the struggles/discrimination faced by these translators during and after the war. Maybe further detail about the experience of the women during their training at the MISLS would be helpful as well in an effort to provide all sides of the story. Some statistics about its success/graduation rate might be important.

Also, a lot of the information in the ATIS section is from the same source. Adding another source might help to balance it out and make sure that multiple perspectives/all the available information is provided. The same goes for the following section (AIJLS).

Tone and Balance

The content added is a neutral representation of the topic. No claims appear to be biased towards a certain topic. The content does not attempt to persuade the reader of one thing or another. All information is factual and backed up by a source. There do not seem to be underrepresented viewpoints. The article goes into detail about different attitudes towards the women, not all of them positive.

Sources and References

All new content is backed up by a reliable source. The content accurately and fairly reflects the cited sources. The sources are thorough and are a good representation of the available literature on the topic. They are current (where possible) and reflect a variety of authors. There are The links to the sources that I checked did work. There are other sources on the topic that might be good additions to the article. Many sections are comprised of information stemming from one source. It might be helpful to add some more sources with differing (or confirming) perspectives to ensure that the article it balanced and not biased in any way.

Organization

The article is clear and easy to understand. The layout flows in a way that makes sense and enhances the reader's understanding of the topic. The use of sections and subsections helps to break up the information for the reader. It does not have any noticeable grammatical or spelling errors.

The only thing is that it might be helpful to mention the notable women in your lead section so that the reader knows where to find it/that it's coming!

Images and Media

The article includes a well-captioned image that helps enhance the reader's understanding of the information. Its location makes sense and is visually appealing. It also adheres to the Wikipedia copyright guidelines. More images, such as images of specific translators would be good additions.

For New Articles Only

The article does meet Wikipedia's notability requirement. There are more than 2-3 independent, reliable secondary sources. likely, the list of sources could be expanded, but is a good start as this is an article draft. The article links many other articles so that it is more discoverable.

Overall Impressions

Strengths of the added content include the organization of the article. It's well organized and easy to understand. The sections and subsections break the information up into manageable ways. Potential areas for improvement include images and media. More images could enhance the reader's understanding of the content. For example, photos of the notable translators or photos of them working. In addition, the lead could possibly have the notable translators added to make the article easier for the reader to navigate.In addition, some more sources could be added to ensure a well-rounded perspective is provided to the reader.

Overall, the article is more complete than before (because it is a new article).