User:ToharZamir/Ethnic enclave/SaraParkwood Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

ToharZamir


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:ToharZamir/Ethnic_enclave?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Ethnic enclave

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Phrasing of the first sentence in the proposed additions is a little unclear--consider restructuring it to simplify, especially the latter end. Also, small note, but I think there is an extra space between immigrants and continue. Other than that, everything looks good! Well-cited and concise.