User:ToharZamir/Tehrangeles/SaraParkwood Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

ToharZamir


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:ToharZamir/Tehrangeles?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Tehrangeles

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Pretty short note here--you could break this change up into two sentences because you're putting forth a lot of ideas, but otherwise this looks good!