User:Tolber2K/Psychosis/Mpatel48 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Tolber2K


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Tolber2K/Psychosis?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Psychosis

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Hi! It looks like you only changed one sentence out of everything you pulled. I have suggested a few edits on the sandbox itself. First, I noticed you brought over a random section from the body, I think you should bring over a little bit of the lead section to further understand the topic. Then you can introduce the body message you are wanting to add a contribution to. This will make it easier to tie in the new information you wish to add. From the looks of it, you are trying to grasp the concept of the topic. A good resource to utilize to get sources would be the UAB library database. It is a huge search engine that allows you to refine areas you are searching for. It also has areas for different types of sources.

Areas you can focus on to add to your contribution:

- Talk about the equity gap, how does Psychosis relate to different populations

- Talk about the negative stigma around the term

- Talk about the additional prevention methods

Overall, your chosen article looks to be well developed. So it would be really interesting to read up on. But, you can add a contribution by fixing any grammatical errors, or checking the mechanics. You could also add to any sections that are missing key details. Or try to add a section about connections. I look forward to seeing your contribution in the future!