User:Tom H 23/sandbox

Topic: invasive non-typhoidal samonella (iNTS) disease

Articles:

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Salmonella

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Salmonellosis

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Salmonella_enterica

Review: (for https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Salmonellosis)

In my opinion, this article is a mixed bag: there are a few things that it does quite well, however, there are many aspects that need a lot of work. In my opinion, the organization of the article was actually quite good: Information is divided into appropriate subsections, almost all of the subsection topics make sense, and they are laid out in a logical order. The only section that I feel doesn't belong in this article is the history section; while this section contains interesting factoids, the information doesn't actually seem that relevant to the disease itself. One other aspect of this article that was done quite well was that all of the information was presented in a neutral way that avoids as much bias as possible. Where this article really suffers, however, is in the veracity and notability of the information it provides. It is clear that a lot of credible sources were used--including many primary literature articles--however, there are numerous instances in which information that should have a citation does not. This can be seen numerous places throughout the article, however, it is especially problematic when the article gives uncited medical information; this can be seen repeatedly in the enteritis sub-section as well as in the treatment section. One more area of this article that needs a lot of work is the notability of the information present. One common theme throughout the article is that the author references extremely specific examples rather than talking about overarching topics that they pertain to; the clearest example of this is the industrial hygiene section, which goes into detail about a specific instance but doesn't talk about how hygienic practices actually work to prevent salmonella outbreaks. Additionally, this article fails to elaborate on some notable topics of pertaining to salmonellosis despite bringing them up in the introductory section briefly. In the introductory section of the article, the author acknowledges iNTS (it is referred to as paratyphoid fever in the article, though this is the same disease) as one of the two major types of salmonella infection, however, it then fails to go into further depth about it. This is most evident in the epidemiology section of the article where the author talks about the epidemiology of salmonellosis in the United States, Europe, and "elsewhere". Even after just some precursory research, I found that iNTS has an incredibly poor burden of disease in Sub-Saharan Africa with a plethora of primary literature articles about various aspects of iNTS in this region. In essence, more research needs to be done rather than just having a short section for everywhere that isn't the United States or Europe. While this article does have many problems, I think it is a good start to a Wikipedia article; if more research is done and the author instead talked the topics in the abstract rather than specific examples, I think it could become quite a solid article.