User:Tommyoconnor16/Jackie savitz/Ogran004 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Tommyoconnor16 - Jaqueline Savitz


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Tommyoconnor16/Jackie_savitz?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
This article includes a well developed lead into the work of Ms.Savitz. It is clear that she has been quite the success in that she has two books published, along with having a credible background with the company Oceana. There is a clear and concise understanding of the information. There is a vast amount of content that is established throughout the Wiki page, some repeats but overall great detail. I think explaining what Oceana is and how Savitz contributed to an organization was a great way to stay cohesive. A little more information on Savitz' early life could be informative, the several images help to visualize the work completed. I see repeats in citations, condensing the repeats to one would make the references clearer and cleaner looking. Overall great piece easy to read, just a few minor changes.