User:Toni.leigh.jones/Lobi people /Johns9ea Peer Review

Peer review
This is where you will complete your peer review exercise. Please use the following template to fill out your review.

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing? toni.leigh.jones
 * Link to draft you're reviewing: User:Toni.leigh.jones/sandbox

Lead
Guiding questions:


 * Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer?
 * No
 * Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic?
 * Yes.
 * Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections?
 * No.
 * Does the Lead include information that is not present in the article?
 * Yes.
 * Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed?
 * Concise.

Content
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added relevant to the topic?
 * Yes.
 * Is the content added up-to-date?
 * Relatively new, from 1980. There might be more recent information available, but I don't know that for certain.
 * Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong?
 * All of the content is on topic.

Tone and Balance
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added neutral?
 * Yes.
 * Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?
 * There is a part that says "most art historians". A generalization like this should be supported or taken out.
 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?
 * No.
 * Does the content added attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another?
 * No.

Sources and References
Guiding questions:


 * Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information?
 * Yes. African Arts is reliable, however, the only properly cited reference does not have any information about marriage poles. To fix this, all that needs to be done is place citations in the proper places throughout the draft.
 * Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic?
 * A lot of the sources I found were in different languages, so the English ones I found were the ones the author used.
 * Are the sources current?
 * All are from 1980 and forward.
 * Check a few links. Do they work?
 * Yes.

Organization
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read?
 * It is concise. There are a few parts that could be taken out such as the reference to "most art historians" and the general mention of "other African cultures".
 * Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors?
 * There are grammar and spelling mistakes. These can be easily fixed with a second draft and having a someone help edit.
 * Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic?
 * The draft is organized well.

Images and Media
Guiding questions: If your peer added images or media


 * Does the article include images that enhance understanding of the topic?
 * Are images well-captioned?
 * Do all images adhere to Wikipedia's copyright regulations?
 * Are the images laid out in a visually appealing way?

For New Articles Only
If the draft you're reviewing is a new article, consider the following in addition to the above.


 * Does the article meet Wikipedia's Notability requirements - i.e. Is the article supported by 2-3 reliable secondary sources independent of the subject?
 * How exhaustive is the list of sources? Does it accurately represent all available literature on the subject?
 * Does the article follow the patterns of other similar articles - i.e. contain any necessary infoboxes, section headings, and any other features contained within similar articles?
 * Does the article link to other articles so it is more discoverable?

Overall impressions
Guiding questions:


 * Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete?
 * Yes. This addition of an art section will greatly help the overall article.
 * What are the strengths of the content added?
 * There is new information that has not been added before. It will help a future reader better understand the Lobi people.
 * How can the content added be improved?
 * There needs to be more in-text citations throughout the piece. There also needs to be some spelling and grammar fixes.