User:ToriCheer18/Dog/JohnB19 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

ToriCheer18


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:ToriCheer18/Dog


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
I feel the lead is very well put together, the only thing I may try to change is to explain what some of the things you listed is since this to the reader may be confusing if they don't know what it is. The content also seems pretty well done with what you have you may have to add some more content since it does leave some things unanswered. The tone seems really well done and don't need change. The article does need some sources. The article is well written and no grammar errors i see. There is no content like picture which you might want to add.