User:ToriSchmitz/Evaluate an Article

Which article are you evaluating?
The article that I am evaluating is of Andy Schor.

Why you have chosen this article to evaluate?
(Briefly explain why you chose it, why it matters, and what your preliminary impression of it was.)

I have chosen this article to evaluate because it was mentioned in class as an example of a weak wikipedia page. My preliminary impression of the page is my shock on how empty his page seems to be. As an important political figure that plays an important role in many individual's lives, I think it would be important that his page be as accurate and up to date as possible. This is so that his constituents and other citizens are able to gage his platform and his history.

Evaluate the article
(Compose a detailed evaluation of the article here, considering each of the key aspects listed above. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what a useful Wikipedia article evaluation looks like.)

Lead SectionThe lead section of this article was rather bare. It includes two sentences that describe Andy Schor in a rather general and barebones way. In comparison, the article regarding Michelle Wu, the current mayor of Boston, whose lead section is considerably larger, composing of several paragraphs highlighting her life. I think this section could do with some more information about the mayor. This could include more information about his past, his party ideology, and overall stand on political issues and the issues that they are most passionate about.

Content Section

The content section of Andy Schor could also use more information added to it. It has minimal sections, with few sentences within those sections. I believe that his early life section should be added to include his high school, and perhaps more information regarding his schooling, like was included within Michelle Wu's article. Additionally, his section for his entire career is a very small paragraph, as compared to Wu's which includes sections for her early career as well as specific paragraphs regarding certain actions taken during her career. I think it would serve beneficially to include a more informative look into Schor's past actions and his overall career choices and background.

The content within the article does not seem to be completely up to date, however, I believe that is because of the overall lack of information included.

Images and Media

Within the article about Schor, there is a severe lack of media. The only picture within the article is an official photo of the man himself, and no other photos were included. The inclusion of photographs and other media within an article provides a break for the eyes and provides an overall more pleasing to look at layout. To compare to Michelle Wu's article, the au

Overall Impressions

My overall impression of this article is that it serves as a good example of a weak and empty wikipedia article, in need of attention. I think the article is strong in the sense that it seems very balanced in the covering of him, not clearly for or against his actions. A negative aspect of the article was a lot of the information was simply listed nearly in bullet point formation, and did not eloquently flow. I think this article needs a lot of work to improve but has potential to be turned into a complete and full article.

Organization

I think this could be improved upon especially with the inclusion of more information. As previously mentioned, I think it would be helpful to include different paragraphs within different subsections. Like separate sections within his CAREER section to discuss specific aspects of his lifespanning career. It remains difficult to fully touch on all the ways this article could be improved simply due to the lack of information included.