User:ToryTaylor99/National responses to the UN plastics initiative/Climatewarrior88 Peer Review

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ToryTaylor99
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 * User:ToryTaylor99/National responses to the UN plastics initiative
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Evaluate the drafted changes
Introduction

-I think an introduction section is unnecessary

-instead, a better use would be explaining the background behind the UN report and its efforts to minimize plastic pollution.

-it is also unclear that this entire page is about the UN report

-needs citations

Global Overview

-not really any information in this section

-needs a lot more substance

-should discuss the initiative a lot more in-depth

-should be an important section that sets up the rest of the page

-I like the section idea but it needs more information

-needs citations

Country Specific Responses

-should the title be "Country-Specific responses"

-I like the idea of commenting on the legislation, implementation, and impact for each country. However, I wonder if it would be more beneficial to just have a large paragraph for each country discussing their response. This would make the structure of the page clearer.

-for many of the countries, it seems that there is little difference between what is being discussed for legislation and implementation

-are there are any countries ignoring the UN report or not doing a good job? Only positive changes are being discussed so this could be worth mentioning

-every country needs a citation for the information provided

-without sources, these are just claims and broad generalizations about what each country is doing

-I like the information in the India and Japan subheadings-- it is clear, concise, and offers specific examples to how India is dealing with plastic pollution

Overall, the information provided so far in the Wikipedia page is adequate but is lacking citations throughout the entire page. While there are sources in the reference section, they are not cited within the page. I think the main issue with the Wikipedia page is the lack of factual information and resources. It would also be effective if each country had more information about its legislation, implementation, and impact structure. Especially for legislation, some examples of specific bills or acts countries are implementing would be very effective. Additionally, the structure is mostly clear and the subheadings are in a sensible order. The headings are easy to follow and make sense as you read through the article. I also think that the page is effective in creating a neutral tone discussing the country responses. There is also a fair balance of information between each country in the "Country-Specific Responses" section.