User:Toygle/Turn A Gundam/CitadelArchives009 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Toygle


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Toygle/Turn A Gundam
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Turn A Gundam

Evaluate the drafted changes
The revised summary of the plot is a decent improvement over the original. It's presented in a much more neutral perspective that makes it easier for the readers to understand the plot of the narrative even if they haven't watched the series for themselves. Nothing about it comes off as biased. The information regarding the manga and the North American release seems to be up-to-date and the sources you've chosen seem credible enough for your draft. Overall, your draft is very solid and some of the improvements you've made are well-written.