User:Tprice98115/Negrophilia/Mbrw Peer Review

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 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Tprice98115 and Radzsoleil


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Negrophilia


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Negrophilia

Evaluate the drafted changes
Fantastic Article!! I have very few critiques. I notice in the first section that there are one or two claims that can be cited. Specifically how the Black population grew in France. The sentence about soldiers is also too long, it can be broken up into a sentence of how negrophilia manifested (art, science, entertainment,) and who/ what filled the role as "cultural ambassador"--I put that in quotes bc I doubt that many African Americans saw themselves as ambassadors, especially since so many were fleeing the US. I think it would be good to add more historical context to answer the "why"? so many Black people, and specifically African Americans chose to leave the US. What were their motivations? We've read a bit about that with Langston and Baldwin :).

I personally would also find it interesting to see a comparison between white American tourists and white French people of their treatment of African Americans. We know that there was anti-foreigner sentiment but this did not seem to apply to the African Americans who found community in France and Montmartre.--> and that just made me think of an addition of montmarte which could go well with one of the last statements in the Bal Nègre where you talk about how social segregation was still viewed / enforced during the day. These are my ideas for now! I can certainly look over it a third and fourth time if there are areas you want to improve and need another pair of eyes for! :)

Marlena