User:Traaaco/He Jiankui affair/Living2022 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Traaaco, LLgreenery


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Traaaco/He_Jiankui_affair?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * He Jiankui affair

Evaluate the drafted changes
In some parts of the lead section, the sentences were abrupt and the connection was missing. In the draft I can see that you have tried to link those connection, that made it easy to navigate through the article lead section. The lead section of the main article page is very intensive with a lot of technical terms that are hard to understand, but you did a pretty good job in simplifying the terms and making the lead section precise. There are a lot facts as which sometimes I get hard to keep a track on. I believe you can make remove some from the of them from the lead section and add maybe another section for that.