User:Tracha3/Arapaima gigas/Emigracew Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Tracha3


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Tracha3/Arapaima_gigas?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Arapaima gigas

Evaluate the drafted changes
·      The information is not biased and relevant to the topic.

·      The sentence structure and wording needs work.

·      Many of the sentences were not coherent and/or they were very repetitive

·      Ex

o   Physiology relocation of the gills to the kidney during air-breathing transition and the kidney also becomes enlarged.

§  This sentence has no structure and looks more like a bullet point in notes. I had to reread this sentence multiple times to puzzle it out.

o   Once changes in gills take place the lamella is less recognizable due to physiology changes. The lamella is no longer visible,

§  You repeat the changes in lamella due to physiology multiple times.

·      The last sentence has unrelated topics that need to be separated.

·      The bibliography is fine, both links work.

·      Overall the information is good, and with a little tweaking it will be a great addition to your article.