User:Trachelophorus/Gebel Ramlah/Lachain Peer Review

Peer review
In general, it seems like a pretty well rounded article. The intro gives a good overview of the rest of the information, the layout of the information seems logical.

Suggested changes: most of these are little and mostly personal preference, so take them with a grain of salt.


 * I don’t think you need to hyperlink burial in the intro.
 * You might want to hyperlink pastoralism though.
 * Do you need two citations for the final neolithic dates?
 * Instead of saying Gebel Ramlah, or “sandy mountain”, maybe say Gebel Ramlah, meaning sandy mountain in (insert language here),
 * “Trans-huming pastoralists” - maybe change to transhumanist
 * Potentially hyperlink Egypt and Nubia

Your lead is easy to understand and informative - perhaps include a little more information, add a sentence about who the people were (pastoralists), maybe something like, “Through dental and cranial analyses, the peoples who used the Gebel Ramlah cemeteries were likely pastoralists” or something, as you have an entire section on the physical anthropology and dentition unmentioned in the lead.

A separate section on artifacts found and descriptions of them might be an interesting section. If there are any other studies done (Like Irish’s dental study) you could include those to lengthen the article.

Neutrality seems to be good, sources are reliable.

Sections are organized well.

If there are any photos available on wikimedia commons, I’d suggest putting some of those in, or maybe a table or graph, just to break up the article. Even a photo of some lithic tool types (they don’t necessarily have to be from the site).