User:Tranhar.ucsf/Choking/Dashdon Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(Tranhar.ucsf)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Choking


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Choking

Lead
The lead section does a good job at summarizing the article as a whole. One update could be to mention briefly the various methods of diagnosis that are being incorporated as well as references to preventative strategies that were introduced as well.

Content
I would look at the potential of fluoroscopy in diagnosis of choking.

Tone
I though the tone of additions was neutral and balanced and did not reveal biases or opinions the authors may have had.

Organization
I though the sections were ordered well.

General
I thought the contributors did a great job at updating the page, in particular the diagnosis section was appropriate and informative.

Diagnosis
I thought the new diagnosis section was informative and appropriate to add. I fixed a few typos in the section, and am noting that there is a source missing in the MRI subsection relating to the high cost of MRIs. There is a placeholder present.

Additionally, perhaps discussing the specificity and sensitivity of the imaging modalities might be useful, as well as other options such as fluoroscopy.

Prevention
In the Prevention section I particularly liked the discussion of anticipatory guidance and the example for it that was included. I fixed a few typos.