User:Tranhar.ucsf/Choking/Vlee2013 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Tranhar.ucsf


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Choking


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Choking

Evaluate the drafted changes
Introduction and lead provides a good high-level overview and summary. It also details the importance of the article by listing that choking is the fourth most common cause of unintentional death. Tone is neutral overall

New diagnosis section provides a helpful overview using language that is easy to understand. I noticed that some of the references from the AHA in this section are from the early 2000s. Perhaps those guidelines still hold today, but I would encourage the editors to see if more recent changes have been made.

I also like the reorganization of the different sections that the group performed, it made the flow more natural and easier to navigate.

Citations overall appear complete and of the ones that I clicked on, were properly linked. The editors and authors also used many credible sources such as the AHA, American Red Cross, CDC, etc.

The balance of the article is well-done with informative information but also visuals and other types of description and language that makes it easy to follow.