User:Transparentv/Apep/5734hls Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Transparentv


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Transparentv/Apep?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Apep

Evaluate the drafted changes

 * Lead Section
 * I appreciate the information you included about the symbolism of Apep - it was very helpful for visualization
 * I was a bit thrown off at times by the article being titled "Apep", but the bulk of the article referring to him as other names - I feel like it might be beneficial to list all the names in the lead, and stick with Apep throughout to maintain consistency
 * Structure
 * I like the structure of the article overall, I think it flows well!
 * My only suggestion would be to replace the summary section with a lead section, and a historical background section
 * Coverage Balance
 * I would like to see more information about historical depictions of Apep, and his ties with things like daily life, art, etc., because it may add more applicability to the article altogether
 * I would also like to see more photos and visual aids!
 * Content Neutrality
 * I feel like you did really well at maintaining content neutrality!
 * Source Reliability
 * I appreciate that your listed sources were fairly recent, though the original article has a few more sources that aren't yet included in yours!