User:Traven Murphy/Story of Sinuhe/Madrugada11 Peer Review

General info
Traven Murphy
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 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Traven Murphy/Story of Sinuhe
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Story of Sinuhe

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

The Lead Section
- The lead looks great! I think that it is already pretty good, but I agree that the last sentence sounds a bit off, and I think your proposal of another last sentence is a great idea.

Clarity of Article Structure
- The article structure looks great! I am not sure if this will make sense in general, or just to me, but I feel like the historical information should come first in the article, and the summary of the Tale of Sinhue should come last. I think it makes more sense that way, but it depends on how other people feel.

Coverage Balance
I think that your plans to rearrange how the article looks a little bit, such as adding more interpretations of the text in order to expand the ideas that stem from the story will help the coverage balance! Also, what you added about the different reasons for Sinhue's reasons for fleeing will help with the coverage balance!

Content Neutrality
I don't believe that you have added anything that changes the neutrality of the article, or anything that could be perceived as language that is trying to persuade the reader a certain way.