User:TravisJJacobs/Occupational hazard/Mastersstudent841 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

TravisJJacobs


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Occupational hazard
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
Background:

- redundant use of 'hazard'

-some grammatical errors

-could use more examples of short/long term risks

Chemical hazard:

-'dangerous' is not the best word choice because dose/exposure duration makes the poison

- why the use of RELs

Bio:

-give ALL examples of possible biological agents

-specific examples for specific occupations (bit confusing right now)

Physical:

-give more occupational specific hazard examples

- define 'illnesses' better

- this sentence may be a bit confusing ... "recommended exposure limits (RELs) of 85 dB(A) for an 8-house time-weighed average (TWA)"

- possibly ass HPP

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1EwrudPw2cGgfeQXMFWNqxX4ku_UU_4PC2wu8W_ybDik/edit#heading=h.6qhzu01nblwf