User:Travkrav/Symbiosis/Holland1801 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Travkrav


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Travkrav/Symbiosis?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Symbiosis

Evaluate the drafted changes
I noticed that there aren't any sources, try to put as many sources in as much as you can and wherever you can :)

I liked how there was information pulled in from multiple different time periods about the development of the definition for your topic, this shows how the topic and science as a whole have developed over the years. Maybe you could detail the current definition a little more with like an example or something along those lines.

For the obligate vs facultative section maybe you could open up the paragraph with an overarching sentence, or something that opens the paragraph up to the discussion about to be outlined. right now it doesn't seem to flow completely as an opening paragraph. I liked how you used example to describe the relationships you were talking about, it draws everything in together.