User:Trentstalling/Sports injury/WTVCC Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Trentstalling


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Trentstalling/Sports_injury?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Sports injury

Evaluate the drafted changes
For my evaluation I noticed that there wasn't an article draft in your sandbox. I am assuming instead of making a draft in your sandbox you just started to edit the actual article. I will be evaluating the article itself based on this assumption.

The first paragraph in the lead is very good. It clearly explains what a sports injury is and also gives great statistics about sports injuries. The second and third paragraphs in the lead I would create a new section and move them to this section maybe about examining or preventing an injury. I feel like these paragraphs take away from the lead and causes to much confusion being opening paragraphs. I think the lead is too detailed so I would make a couple changes to make the lead more precise so its easier on people to determine if this article has the information they are looking for. The types of sports injury section is very clear. I think you did a great job in the opening paragraph of this section and then on explaining the different types of injuries. I think you did a good job on including the external links to other articles that explain the types of issues in more detail. I would include what the next common sport is in the very last sentence in the paragraph under the types of sports injuries heading. In the soft tissue injuries I would include bullet point to show the different types of soft tissue injuries. I think the bullet points in the hard tissue injuries are easier to understand and should be added to the soft tissue injuries section. I think you use great statistics in the overuse injuries section and the head and neck injuries section. I would maybe think of adding statistics to the first two types of injuries sections as well. I would add a couple more statistics to the risk factors section to show just how much of a risk factor these injuries are. The prevention section of the article is very clear and has a very good layout. In the preseason screening section of the article, I would include more types of screening. I think that it would have more of an impart to describe a couple more of the types of screening and how beneficial they are to athletes. In the sport injury prevention for children section, I think that statistics and bullet points are great to describe the section. I would add more types of prevention that children might have to do that adults would not do. The sports related emotional stress section is very important to the article. I think this section has great facts and statistics. I think that it would be great if you added different sections within this section. I think if you made it to be different sections it would be easier to tell what facts and information in a quicker way. I think having a impact and different effects that these stresses cause would be great sections within this section. Overall the article has great facts and statistics. I think there should be a better layout to the article by adding a couple of different sections to make it easier on people trying to find factual information quicker.