User:Trevormyrvold/National Voter Registration Act of 1993/ProfNMat Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Trevormyrvold


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Trevormyrvold/National Voter Registration Act of 1993


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * National Voter Registration Act of 1993

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead: I would include one statement in the lead that summarizes its path toward enactment, that is, that it was introduced several times before passing. Perhaps another statement about who favored/opposed the legislation.

Organization/Content: I would add a whole new section after "Background" called "Passage in Congress" or "Legislative History" and move the last paragraph from the background section to this new section. Here I would put your new information about who favored and opposed the legislation, and your quotes from the hearings. Be sure to clearly identify the speakers. You could devote a paragraph each to committee consideration, floor consideration, and the president's position.

Tone and balance: When you say that the Democrats wanted the bill so they would receive more votes, and the Republicans didn't want it, then be sure you have a source for this so that it's well-documented and doesn't sound like opinion/speculation.

Sources: I see that you're planning to use some sources from Factiva, but be sure to cite the original source because Factiva is just a database for looking up newspaper articles.