User:Treyj96/Sport psychology/Gsims99 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Treyj96


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Treyj96/Sport_psychology?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
Great effort to slim down the excess of the article so far. I do think however that some of the omitted sections in the "Renewed growth and emergence as a discipline" could still be beneficial to the article since it gives insight into how sports psychology came to be. I think the section regarding the "Journal of Sport Psychology" should be included because it lets the reader know when this field really started to take off.

You mention in parentheses that the article goes back and forth between AAASP and AASP. The article states that in 2007, the abbreviation was shortened to AASP. I think making an effort to try and clarify that throughout the article could be useful. I think using AAASP when taking about events prior to 2007 would be useful and then for events after 2007 you could use AASP. Also, it could be worth just changing all abbreviations to AASP and mentioning that it was formerly known as AAASP. I think either of those approaches would make the article seem a lot less confusing.

In the "Common areas of study" section of the article, the "Athletic performance" subsection begins with the phrase "One of the most interesting domains of research...". That seems rather opinionated so addressing that phrasing and making it more neutral would be beneficial. Additionally, that subsection is rather small so trying to find research on that area could be useful.