User:TriMinhHuynh/Media and American adolescent sexuality/Avillalobostovar Peer Review

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 * Whose work are you reviewing?

TriMinhHuynh


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 * User:TriMinhHuynh/Media and American adolescent sexuality
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Media and American adolescent sexuality

Evaluate the drafted changes
I think that your content and organization are well written. You provided information on how American adolescents are exposed to pornography and how they are exposed to it. Having the statistic on there is also incredibly helpful to the reader because they can see how much of the population is affected. For the subsections under "The Influence of Pornography on Adolescents" I think that you can go into more detail, specifically for Conceptualized Distortion and Addiction to Pornography. You have a lot of good articles listed in the references that can help you write and explain how pornography can affect any present or future sexual encounters that the adolescent encounters. Same with the addiction section, you can explain how this can negatively impact the individual other than just psychologically. Also mentioning how this is treated could help readers understand and learn what approaches are taken for these individuals.

- Alicia V.T.