User:TrippyVaultBoy/Plague of Athens/Rachelbaer Peer Review

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ExplorerRoxy, TrippyVaultBoy
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There were a couple things that I believe would be helpful to have linked to other possible wiki articles if someone wasn't sure what it was and wanted to easily access a resource for it, I have underlined those things.

I have bolded anything that I thought you might need a citation for.


 * That last sentence of the first part feels like it might need some support for that statement with a citation, also a small typo with "lead" I believe should be "led".

I've italicized sections that were confusing for me and could maybe use some elaboration.


 * 1) The first sentence of the second paragraph feels a bit confusing and conflicting because you state something and then immediately follow it with saying that it may not be true. If you're trying to reference a primary/secondary source that may be biased to give a sense of the culture and reaction towards the plague I would definitely expand on it and cite it. It's hard to tell if you're saying that certain people were more susceptible to it because of comorbidities, occupation, or how the plague was handled and treated by the community.
 * 2) This following sentence is also confusing for the reasons related to and since it directly follows 1.
 * 3) The wording is a bit odd and my brain trips over it. Did they have less access to fresh fruits and vegetables because of the war, or was that normal in their diet?

Overall I believe that the addition of the Epidemiology section to the current wiki page will be extremely helpful. The current content is concise and doesn't go off topic.

Epidemiology
Thucydides claims that the plague spread from Ethiopia to Athens. The plague first emerged in the port of Piraeus from ships with plague infected passengers.(Need thucy citation) '''From there it spread to Athens via the Long Walls where refugees would camp out. The small space and poor hygiene of the people living in the Long Walls lead to a significant spread of the plague.'''

1. The plague did not affect certain groups over others, however this could be incorrect because there is a lack of details of how the plague spread among inbreeds and workers. 2.Physicians and health care workers were at a higher risk to catch the plague due to the exposure of other diseases. Higher ranking members of society were at a lower risk to catch the plague due to better living standards and better hygiene. Lack of food was not an issue for the Athens, for they had plenty of grain storage. 3.''Athens most likely lacking vitamin C from fruits and vegetables during the war. The lack of vitamin C caused a lower immunity''. The Plague of Athens was most likely caused by a reservoir disease or respiratory disease, though neither have been confirmed. If the plague was caused by a reservoir disease, it would be very similar to arboviral diseases or typhus as later mentioned. If it was a respiratory disease, it would most likely be similar to smallpox.

possible control of diseases