User:Trippy coolio/Voodoo in popular culture/Sophier7416 Peer Review

General info
(Trippy Coolio) Evan Cole
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Trippy%20coolio/Voodoo_in_popular_culture?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):

Evaluate the drafted changes
Evan, the main concern I have is simply adding more on the topic. It looks like you're completely rewriting this article, is that the case? Also, since this is about Voodoo, you should consider using Vodún! I think it would really show what you have learned in class.

Minor comments:

- capitalize "Satanism"

- "Modern day Voodoo is usually associated with Satanism and witchcraft. This is because..." You should conjunct these sentences into one. The line, "This is because of how voodoo is presented in media and pop culture." is an incomplete sentence by itself. Maybe say "...associated with Satanism and witchcraft because..."

- review your grammar. Ex: Common splice: "Vodou is commonly connected with harm and animal sacrifice,  the main use for Vodou is healing." Use ';' to connect the two phrases, not ','

- citations?