User:Trollny/Afro-Asians/Dududungha Peer Review

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Organization
There are some common grammatical errors, often misusing plurals. Below are a list of edits to the grammatical errors.


 * During the Vietnam War, many American s soldiers found themselves fathering and subsequently left leaving behind their mixed-race children ( or (Amerasian) with their native Vietnamese mothers.
 * The demographics of servicemen in the Vietnam w War have also changed in recent history, especially with the integration of those with of African-American descent s into the war efforts.
 * Throughout the course of the Vietnam War, the population of Afro-Vietnamese saw a drastic increase s.

The paragraph mostly consists of single statements. They could be reorganized so that the statements connect or expanded upon.

Content
The content fills a much needed gap in the article that is Afro-Asians in Vietnam and the history. Here is some critique:


 * For this statement: "During the Vietnam War, many Americans soldiers found themselves fathering and subsequently left behind their mixed-race children( or Amerasian) with their native Vietnamese mother." I can see where this can lead into African American soldiers contributing to the the Afro-Vietnamese population in Vietnam due to the activities of those soldiers while on service in Vietnam, but as a standalone statement, it does not contribute to the discussion of Afro-Vietnamese people.


 * This statement: "The demographics of servicemen in the Vietnam war have also change in recent history, especially with the integration those with African-American descents into the war efforts." I believe needs a source and it is not clear what it is trying to convey. Is it that the demographics of servicemen in Vietnam have changed in recent history because of integration with people of African descent in the military? Or is that the demographics of the servicemen in the Vietnam War have changed from the demographics of earlier times because of the integration of people of African descent?