User:Trollny/Afro-Asians/Racoon dolphin Peer Review

General info
Trollny
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Trollny/Afro-Asians?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Afro-Asians

Lead

 * No changes to the lead have been made. Right now the lead is very short and just a high level definition, changing it would be more of a choice on rewriting the whole thing just to make it more informative rather than to reflect this edit. Not sure if for this topic it makes sense to though, as the article is largely a high level overview and then dive into many specific subgroups.

Content

 * Content added is about Vietnamese Afro-Asians. The old section was pretty curt and just read like a list, so adding some more context and analysis is worthwile for this section. It probably would also be worth expanding on how the babies mentioned in the section were discriminated against rather than just saying it happened though.

Tone and Balance

 * Tone is neutral, no problems here.

Sources and References

 * Sources look good, I'm not sure why they show up weird in the citation boxes in text but if that can be fixed before pushing changes live I think there's no other problems.

Organization

 * There's some grammar issues (stuff like verb tense and plurals) throughout the paragraph that should be fixed in the next round of editing. Might be worth putting the text into a Google Doc so Google's grammar check or something like Grammarly can highlight them.

Overall

 * The edit is a worthwhile expansion of the Vietnamese section of the article. Some issues with grammar need to be addressed and there is room for a bit more content expansion in regards to how Afro-Asians were discriminated against, but once those are addressed this will be a good update for the article.