User:Tropical Ocean 1792/LGBT migration/Amanzo2 Peer Review


 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Leonid Libenzon


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Leonid Libenzon/LGBT migration
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * LGBT migration

Peer Review:

Hi Leo! I think you are doing a great job overall on your edits and just trying to go more in depth on sections that need it. Since it is a B-class it is already in good shape and you are doing a great job of lengthening and strengthening it. I like that you add just a little more detail in the Lead section as it is a little thin. Additionally, I also think it's a good idea that you beefed up the history/background section since the original had very little detail and context. I like your plans and your current edits in the additional further sections that incorporate additional details and especially for particular groups that face extra barrier like bisexuals as you mention.

Once again, I think overall your edits and plans for this article are good. I would just be aware of cleaning up typos and grammatical issues before transferring back over and making the official edits. Additionally, I noticed in the original article there is the section that goes about these issues by region and under "Asia" it just links to another article with nothing else, do you think it would be possibly worthwhile to add in quick summary or some detail to that section. Regardless, great work so far!

Hello Annabel,

Thank you for your motivating comments. I will continue working in these directions. When it comes to the typos and some grammatical issues, I will definitely check everything before moving my text to Wikipedia. Indeed, "Asia" is an empty section that should be filled with some summary at least. Although embarking on the discussion of LGBT migration in Asian countries was not one of my priorities, I will think about what could be done with this section. Nonetheless, it would be a fascinating area of work for me. Again, thank you so much for your insightful comments.

With best regards,

Leo