User:Tropical chair/Youssef Ksiyer/5fm9 Peer Review

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 * Whose work are you reviewing?

User: Tropical chair


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 * User:Tropical chair/Youssef Ksiyer


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Evaluate the drafted changes
review of the lead


 * I would remove the birthdate and stating that he is born in Casablanca, Morocco from the lead section and just keep it in the infobox because you already say in the first sentence that he is Moroccan so it is not entirely necessary to say it again
 * the lead is very concise
 * maybe make the entire first two sentences into one long sentence to give the article some flow and make it easier to read
 * your lead does a god job of establishing who he is in a concise manner

content

 * the content added is relevant to the topic and is up to date + does a good job bring representation to this area

tone and balance

 * the content added is neutral and does not appear to be biased

sources and references

 * you use his personal blog as a source which I think we were advised against doing
 * you use a good variety of sources
 * I checked the links, they all seem to work
 * is there any information about him you could use from a more reliable source than his personal blog? perhaps a bigger website or news source?
 * the sources are current

organization

 * within the career section there are some grammatical and syntax errors, maybe give it a reread (misplaced punctuation, lack of spaces between words)
 * the manner in which it is organized makes sense, however since he is a comedian perhaps add a little bit of information about his style of comedy or maybe the format of his comedy, because as a reader you don't get a super clear indication of what his comedy is like
 * maybe describe more about what he is hosting, what his stand up events were like
 * perhaps to make it more clear separate the non comedy side of his career from the comedy side
 * your writing is clear, perhaps work on making your sentences a little less choppy would make it a bit easier to eat and give it more of a flow

images and media

 * the image makes sense and is helpful in giving an idea of who he is - maybe add a caption talking about when this was taken and what the context was in order to make it even more clear

you do a good job of explaining who he is in a very concise manner. I feel though that you could maybe find a more reliable source than a personal blog in order to cement your research - however I may be wrong about wikipedia rules regarding this type of source. the article is organized in a nice, visually pleasing way and you do a great job of using what wikipedia has to offer.

I had no idea who this man was before so this article was very informative to me! I suggest that rereading and rejigging some of the sentence structure and adding more information about his comedy career would be a great final touch to this article. good job!