User:Ts2023tv/Lithium peroxide/Bonobo12345 Peer Review

General info
Ts2023tv
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 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Ts2023tv/Lithium peroxide
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Lithium peroxide:

Evaluate the drafted changes
The lead has not been updates to include the added uses of lithium hydroxide. A breif mention will suffice.The lead has not been changed much except for the last sentence where the author has used the phrase "space technologies" which is even more unclear.

The author has added relevant content regarding its applications. The original article was unclear in explaining its uses but the author has added extra explanations that are easier to understand. The author could add the phrase "(above)" next to the explanation just to help guide the reader. The explanation with lithium peroxide batteries is a lot clearer. It could help to link the phrase "energy density". It is also assumed that the sources used are the exact same ones as the ones in the article. But if that is not the case, additional sources should be referenced. This is especially necessary for the part containing its function as a catalyst which was not included in the original article. A reminder to use secondary sources for references.

Overall the additions have made the article more complete and easier to understand. I think for a basic understanding of the material, what is written is sufficient.